My fanfic – Female Commander

female commander

Female Commander

rating: K
condition: complete
genre:humor
author: Mia
beta reader: 7Ace

I kept wondering how the French guard, exspecially, Alain would act when they saw their commander in dress :mrgreen:

They were walking in the garden of Versailles, and then he embraced her in his arm…

“That was you…that night that was really you…”

“I…”

“What are you two…doing?” that was the Queen; she just came and saw her beloved, Fersen, was embracing her best friend, Oscar…

“Ah…we…” Fersen let Oscar go from his arms, and she ran away…

“He knew that was me” she thought “what should I do? Oh, Fersen, I was ready to let you go out of my mind…I was ready to accept the fact that you weren’t mine. Your heart belongs to her Majesty…” Her Majesty? Was the Queen who just saw her and Fersen right over there, in the garden…?

“Oscar, she can’t see anybody now, her Majesty is too tired.” Madame Noeilles said when Oscar came to see Antoinette.

“But…”

“When she gets well, you can see her.”

“Please Madame Noeilles, I must see her right now, I need to talk to her.”

“Let her in…” said Antoinette in very low voice, Oscar entered the room, it hurt her to see Antoinette crying, and it was even more hurtful this time since she knew it was because of her…because of the former guard that was supposed to protect her, because of the friend who had sworn to be on her side always…but this was a misunderstanding …

“Your Majesty, it’s not what you …”

Antoinette interrupted her.

“Don’t say anything Oscar; you don’t need to explain to me… I…I just…” said Antoinette while crying. “Congratulations Oscar, I wish you happiness, he’s lucky that he found a woman like you…” that’s the pride of the Queen who said these words. In this situation, she couldn’t talk to Oscar as a friend. She couldn’t even look into her eyes. That just hurt Oscar more and more, she was crying with every word the Queen said. She found herself guilty for a crime she didn’t even do…

“Please Your Majesty, please listen to me; it’s not what you think!!! It’s …”

“Oscar, I knew you love him, I saw you look at him just exactly the way I looked at him…but I just didn’t want to believe that…”

“No, Your Majesty, please, he was just asking me…if I had wore a dress…”

“You? In a dress?” Antoinette eyes were bigger than ever, even though they were really big themselves…

“Oh…”Oscar blushed, but at least she had steered the conversation in another direction “just…because my nanny always complains about that, so I decided to wear a dress one time to stop her…”

“Oscar, I don’t believe you…” the queen said with a slyly smile, but she did believe her…she couldn’t image Oscar in dress, and she knew Fersen could never think of that himself…but now, she wanted to play a little game with her friend, maybe to punish Oscar because she had made her feel bad…

“Your Majesty…”

“If you really had worn a dress, do that again at the ball next week!”

“Your Majesty?”

“Oscar, you did that for your nanny, and you won’t do that for me?”

“Your Majesty…not like that…but…”

“So that’s ok! Now you can go, remember to come to the ball next week…” the queen gets close to her “in a dress, if you want me trust you.” she said with a deep voice.

…………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………

Now Oscar was in her room. “what should I do? I have to come, I can’t let her Majesty down…” she thought “but I’ll never wear a dress again, never…” she shook her head.

Knock, knock.

“Come in!”

“Oscar, what are you doing in the dark?” André got into the room and asked. “I’m going to bring some candles…”

“Just let it be!”

“Oscar?!”

“Forget about the candles, come here, close…”

André came near her and sat right next to her.

“Ok, what’s your problem?”

“…I have to go to her majesty’s ball next week…”

“And…?”

“She wants to see me in a dress…”

“You in a dress again?” André felt his heartbeat getting faster, his Oscar would be in a dress again, and this time, not for Fersen…

“André, help me out of this!” Oscar looked at him, her hopeless look made him laugh “André! This is not funny!”

“Ok, ok…Oscar, you have the whole week to think of that, don’t worry…”

………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………

Tonight, Oscar had to go to the ball, in a dress. She sighed when she thought of that…she had the whole week to find a solution, but she couldn’t. She had transferred to the French guard, and the job was really heavy there…she even had a fight with her soldier…what was his name? Alain? And now it was time to go…she sighed again…

…………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………

“Alain, is this ok?” LaSalle asked when they tried to sneak in to the palace.

“Don’t worry, if anything happens, that woman will get the blame!”

“But…”

“It’ll be fine, trust me!”

“Hey, somebody’s here!” Francois said and grasped his companions and they hid behind the tree…they saw a blond woman, in a luxurious white dress, talking with a man.

“André, I…this…” she said, but they couldn’t heard clearly…

“André?” LaSalle said “that’s André?”

“shhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh……”

“You…don’t…” André said.

“I can’t hear anything…”

“We can’t hear anything from this distance!” Alain said “let’s get closer…”

They were talking:

“But I just can’t!”

“Don’t worry, you look fine!”

“Women!” LaSalle smiled “why do they always wonder how they look?”

“Now I wonder how she looks,” Alain whispers, “I can’t see her face!”

“Hey, is that…the Queen?”

Yes, that was Antoinette; she came near the suspicious couple…

“Just like I guessed…” the Queen smiled.

“She’s beautiful…” LaSalle said.

“Shrrrrrrrrrr….” Alain hit LaSalle’s head with the knuckles of his fingers.

“I know your stubbornness won’t let you show yourself in front of the court like this…”

“Your Majesty…I…”

“Don’t worry!” Antoinette laughed, “I just want to see you in dress, Oscar…”

“Oscar?” the French guards started “that’s our commander?”

“Could you be silent?” Alain said, he was the only one who didn’t make any noise… but Antoinette and the other two people didn’t heard them…they continued their talk.

“I know I had made difficulties for you… and now I saw you, you don’t have to go to the ball if you don’t want…”

“Thank you, Your Majesty…” Oscar sighed with relief.

“But Oscar, you owed me something…turn!”

“Your Majesty?”

“Turn around, let me see you from the other side!”

“I…but…Your Majesty…I…”

“Oscar, you want to turn here, or turn in the ball room?” the Queen looked at her with a smile that let her know she didn’t have a choice…she turned obediently, and the French guard felt like their hearts stopped beating…they thought they saw a beautiful white butterfly, a seductive swan,…no, including the music like a heaven’s anthem…they must be seeing a fay, a fairy, a nymph, a goddess…no word can describe her beauty…her golden-honey hair was sparkling, her blue sapphire eyes were twinkling in the night… well, this was the time LaSalle should say “she’s beautiful”, but he was frozen…

“Ok, I just want to see how beautiful you are in a dress, Oscar,” the queen laughed when she saw Oscar’s red face and the infatuated face of André “well, I see you had told me true, Fersen couldn’t believe this lovely woman was you…” and she noticed André still couldn’t take his look away from Oscar “Even your childhood friend couldn’t believe this!” the Queen smiled again, but nobody thought she was beautiful any more…”Ok, you can go now, Oscar, sorry for my joke…” then she left, still smiling…

“Ok, let’s go home!” Oscar said.

“Now? You don’t want to…dance?”

“André!” Oscar shouted furiously.

“Ok, ok.” André stepped back. “I got it! Let’s go home…” and he followed her, well, he really wanted to dance with her, but…this was fine, seeing her dressing like that…his Oscar…his Oscar was beautiful in dress.

“Wow.” LaSalle whistled after they left “Did you guys see what I just saw?”

“We all just saw a dream…”

“Wow, she was amazingly beautiful. How could this beautiful delicate woman be the same tough commander??”

“I don’t know, but I really love to see her dressing like that at the barracks!”

All the men laughed, all the men, except Alain…

“What do you think, Alain?”


“Hey, Alain!”


Alain couldn’t answer; he turned into a stone statue…

The end

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6 thoughts on “My fanfic – Female Commander

  1. Hmm ….. I like it 😉 … its funny not so funny but it’s so interesting 😦 …poor Andre he was too close to dance with his beautiful commander
    8) I think only Alan knew whom was be that amazing woman…..
    Want more …. 😆

    • Alain is one of my favorite characters, he’s a little rude, but handsome and young 😳 , of course I’ll write more about him :mrgreen:

  2. Wow, it’s totally awesome. I’m out of breath when I read this fanfic. It is obviously a burst of excitement. I love the way you create the storyline, the reason for the scenes to happen. Totally cool! Love it! Keep creating, my friend!
    Linh

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